Sela Locke

I don't have a whole lot to say, and the reviewers above got most of the nitpicks, so really I just have a question... Have you read Twilight? Because this ...

Dude, Nu, this's insanity. With capital I and a capital SANITY. Okay, copying off of Will Ferrel, now. But anyways, yeah. One thing I noticed, (no matter how insignificant compared ...

I have read every single one of these chapters and I have to admit you are a fairly good writer. You have nice imagery, and you are descriptive. But I ...

I honestly don't know why everyone is going on and on about how good it is. No, the plot is good, the idea is good, but -- there's so little ...

There's nothing wrong with making the prologue - or preface - mysterious and flabbergasting. You have time to explain later. Also to describe the narrator - later. But do remember ...

I think Always got most of the nitpicks, so I'll just stick to the overall style... You switch from past to present tense, and back, a lot. It's bad grammar, ...

Wordless I am becoming. Stop being so good, Nu. It makes me look frail and lame, and I no likey. HOWEVER, you're taking me down to Albertson's later, since it's ...

Mostly I said all I needed to in the first two chapters. Just stick by those and you'll be find, although I may add a few things later on if ...

Okay, I'm not really one for nitpicks, especially when the story has bigger, more urgent problems. So I will not nitpick, but try to address bigger probs. Now, within YWS, ...

Not bad, but it's really choppy, and not long enough to get a real feel for the place your trying to put the reader in. I mean, the problem with ...

Niiice! I'd rather not nit-pick, considering others hav mostly gotten it down, but I agree one hundred percent with Chern. An imagination that awesome really could go a long away. ...

This was, without a doubt, the worst story I have ever read, YWS or anywhere else. It mixed all the wrong things, and included a guy named Jesus Christ who ...

The thing that bugged me most about this was that I really didn't like the MC. I actually hated her. I know she was in love with her husband, but ...

I think you're going a little bit too far with the whole 'completely, ridiculously random'ness. After a time, even the funniest random can get dumb. And you didn't even wait. ...

Oh my gosh, I loved it! I didn't find any things to correct, but that's probably 'cause your such a great writer. The funny parts made me laugh, which is ...